Depression
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burself
Big brother
NANA
princess
w_ch
TheUkrainian
the youth
jamie
Nounette
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Depression
Depression, sadness, grief and sorrow
These are words i get used to
"why all this ", many of you wonder
I will tell you in brief, with chronological order
It began early, when i was young
I had a cat, i called it "song"
I fed, played, and have fun with "song"
Until the destiny, took it along
Falling from the roof, the distance was high
The way the cat died, i was shocked by
Since that cat was my devoted friend
I cried and cried, and was all the time sad
Trying to forget, by the help of time
I was not ready for the worst to come
My grandfather passed away suddenly
The only person i was living with in a harmony
Leaning down trying to kiss his forehead
"cheer up, it is life" these words i heard
witnessing the funeral, the soil was thrown
The crowd left, leaving him alone
I was still there in the middle of the dead
Staying to the sunset, i must be mad
It was cloudy, windy, to see was hard
On the death of my grand-fa, nature was sad
I stood up, took a last glance on his grave
To reach the cemetery door, i must be brave
With unsteady steps, and a random pace
Imagining the dead leaving their graves
Not looking back, i walked straight
Expecting a shoulder tap, i looked left and right
I felt better, one month later
More happier, and a little bit sadder
Hopeful, taking the advice of an old friend
"smile to life, will smile to you back" i tried
to forget the past, to seek for new start, i decided
But, unfortunately, when i did, smiles were expired....
These are words i get used to
"why all this ", many of you wonder
I will tell you in brief, with chronological order
It began early, when i was young
I had a cat, i called it "song"
I fed, played, and have fun with "song"
Until the destiny, took it along
Falling from the roof, the distance was high
The way the cat died, i was shocked by
Since that cat was my devoted friend
I cried and cried, and was all the time sad
Trying to forget, by the help of time
I was not ready for the worst to come
My grandfather passed away suddenly
The only person i was living with in a harmony
Leaning down trying to kiss his forehead
"cheer up, it is life" these words i heard
witnessing the funeral, the soil was thrown
The crowd left, leaving him alone
I was still there in the middle of the dead
Staying to the sunset, i must be mad
It was cloudy, windy, to see was hard
On the death of my grand-fa, nature was sad
I stood up, took a last glance on his grave
To reach the cemetery door, i must be brave
With unsteady steps, and a random pace
Imagining the dead leaving their graves
Not looking back, i walked straight
Expecting a shoulder tap, i looked left and right
I felt better, one month later
More happier, and a little bit sadder
Hopeful, taking the advice of an old friend
"smile to life, will smile to you back" i tried
to forget the past, to seek for new start, i decided
But, unfortunately, when i did, smiles were expired....
bryne_kh2000- Number of posts : 175
Age : 35
Location : NEVERLAND
Registration date : 2009-05-07
Re: Depression
Thank You Bryne !! I Cried When I Read It !! Since I Remembered The Death Of My Grand Father (Allah Yara7mou) !! And My Rabbit When Our Neighbours Stole It Haha And I Cried And Cried !! Carry On Brother !! Don't Stop Here !! Waiting Other Poems !!
Re: Depression
hello
your poem effected me really
yes we should forget our sad events and carry out living
and never lose hope
your poem effected me really
yes we should forget our sad events and carry out living
and never lose hope
jamie- Number of posts : 57
Age : 35
Registration date : 2010-01-31
Re: Depression
It was a very good poem bryne..that's what i'm talking about.
well..i didn't have a cat, but i had a grandpa that died and i felt about the same..if not worse.
Try to keep writing whenever you feel down in the dumps.
well..i didn't have a cat, but i had a grandpa that died and i felt about the same..if not worse.
Try to keep writing whenever you feel down in the dumps.
the youth- Number of posts : 281
Age : 36
Location : Home..where the heart is
Registration date : 2009-06-02
Re: Depression
..................................................Speechless is TheUkrainian !Masterpiece , I really felt this warm words ............................
You could depict all your emotions and feelings within stanzas.
I strongly wish you to keep writing poetry , Its harder than porse.
All best wishes from TheUkrainian
You could depict all your emotions and feelings within stanzas.
I strongly wish you to keep writing poetry , Its harder than porse.
All best wishes from TheUkrainian
TheUkrainian- Number of posts : 104
Age : 37
Location : Deerfield, New York
Registration date : 2009-05-28
Re: Depression
Hello Bryne,
Your peom has not only an aesthetic value, but it's extended to tackle a common feeling in all of us. To lose the beloved ones makes us rhyme in a beautiful and in an effective way. I haven't found a better way to release the captured and unwanted feelings within, than using a pen on a sheet of paper, guided by the wide imagination. You've nailed both aims: A piece of art in addition to its deep meangings. Well-done Bryne. Carry on and never give up! Wish you the best.
Your peom has not only an aesthetic value, but it's extended to tackle a common feeling in all of us. To lose the beloved ones makes us rhyme in a beautiful and in an effective way. I haven't found a better way to release the captured and unwanted feelings within, than using a pen on a sheet of paper, guided by the wide imagination. You've nailed both aims: A piece of art in addition to its deep meangings. Well-done Bryne. Carry on and never give up! Wish you the best.
Re: Depression
interesting...you have Edgar Allan Poe's simple expression of deep melancholic feelings....make the beginnig deeper it would be a master piece.Develop the end, your poem is close to what is known as narrative poetry. I did like your poem...a nice surprise
princess- Number of posts : 28
Age : 143
Registration date : 2010-03-04
Re: Depression
Bryne is very appreciated to all your comments . That is what i call the fuel to carry on writing , the road seems far though .Thank you very much
bryne_kh2000- Number of posts : 175
Age : 35
Location : NEVERLAND
Registration date : 2009-05-07
Re: Depression
It's really nice Bryne. I like it a lot.
Carry on brother.
Carry on brother.
NANA- Number of posts : 143
Age : 34
Location : Secret Garden
Registration date : 2009-10-29
Re: Depression
sweet and nice poem Bryne
i realy liked this poem, because it presents a common theme , especially the begining it's artistic for me.
carry on body
i realy liked this poem, because it presents a common theme , especially the begining it's artistic for me.
carry on body
Big brother- Number of posts : 129
Age : 39
Location : right here
Registration date : 2009-05-07
Re: Depression
Very nice words man
Thewolf- Number of posts : 1050
Age : 424
Location : Desert
Registration date : 2010-01-12
Re: Depression
Really you took me wherever you went through this very effective attractive carefully chosen words poem.congratulations our poet.
burself- Number of posts : 87
Age : 39
Location : somewhere
Registration date : 2009-06-16
Re: Depression
How effective poem it is Bryne.You made me remember an old grief. Carry on writing Bryne, and I hope that the depression and sadness turn to hope and happiness.
chinda- Number of posts : 399
Age : 124
Location : Starland
Registration date : 2009-11-03
Re: Depression
Glad that you like my poem. Thank you mates.
bryne_kh2000- Number of posts : 175
Age : 35
Location : NEVERLAND
Registration date : 2009-05-07
Re: Depression
I can't find the words to describe your wonderful poem.Very sensitive.
wimened- Number of posts : 49
Age : 112
Location : Blida
Registration date : 2010-01-27
Re: Depression
Thank you Wimend, really appreciated
bryne_kh2000- Number of posts : 175
Age : 35
Location : NEVERLAND
Registration date : 2009-05-07
Re: Depression
I was still there in the middle of the dead
Staying to the sunset, i must be mad
It was cloudy, windy, to see was hard
On the death of my grand-fa, nature was sad
Bryne, u r talking about me here....
Thanks a lot, very nice and touching words......waiting for more.
Staying to the sunset, i must be mad
It was cloudy, windy, to see was hard
On the death of my grand-fa, nature was sad
Bryne, u r talking about me here....
Thanks a lot, very nice and touching words......waiting for more.
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Re: Depression
May Allah bless who u lost Bryne, i wish i die before anyone i loved, and still love. u reminded by my three cats who sharing life with me, i lost them one after one since my childhood, i still can see them between my eyes. we r sharing same feelings, we r falling in cats .
I remember too the months when my mum was sick and i suffered, i was young... she still alive hmd, i can't stand if i lose someone i love
I remember too the months when my mum was sick and i suffered, i was young... she still alive hmd, i can't stand if i lose someone i love
Thewolf- Number of posts : 1050
Age : 424
Location : Desert
Registration date : 2010-01-12
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