A broken dream
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A broken dream
Still standing under the falling rain,
With no umbrella;they thought I lost my brain.
"How come he's still there and doesn't complain?
What's the use of doing so?what's his gain?"
They whispered those words in a disdain.
What they didn't know of is my special case.
All they could see is what I am on the surface.
If they only looked deeper and followed the pace,
They'd find out that everyone has something to chase
No matter what dangers he or she might face.
Mine was vaporized & from my mind, I was to dispel
With the help of that pure rain which on my head fell.
I tend to think big and all the trivial thoughts I repel
And hate being trapped in a hardly noticed shell.
Yet, this thinking can be cataclysmic, I must tell.
With no umbrella;they thought I lost my brain.
"How come he's still there and doesn't complain?
What's the use of doing so?what's his gain?"
They whispered those words in a disdain.
What they didn't know of is my special case.
All they could see is what I am on the surface.
If they only looked deeper and followed the pace,
They'd find out that everyone has something to chase
No matter what dangers he or she might face.
Mine was vaporized & from my mind, I was to dispel
With the help of that pure rain which on my head fell.
I tend to think big and all the trivial thoughts I repel
And hate being trapped in a hardly noticed shell.
Yet, this thinking can be cataclysmic, I must tell.
Re: A broken dream
How wonderful to read your writings Wady
No comments about your poem, you have captured it.... I really loved it, especially the first part... Artfully written, it looks so alive!!
Nice poem though a bit pessimistic.
No comments about your poem, you have captured it.... I really loved it, especially the first part... Artfully written, it looks so alive!!
Nice poem though a bit pessimistic.
MrL- Number of posts : 62
Age : 34
Registration date : 2010-05-21
Re: A broken dream
Wonderful poem, w-ch. I really like it, good job.
I do love this stanza:
What they didn't know of is my special case.
All they could see is what I am on the surface.
If they only looked deeper and followed the pace,
They'd find out that everyone has something to chase
No matter what dangers he or she might face.
I do love this stanza:
What they didn't know of is my special case.
All they could see is what I am on the surface.
If they only looked deeper and followed the pace,
They'd find out that everyone has something to chase
No matter what dangers he or she might face.
chinda- Number of posts : 399
Age : 124
Location : Starland
Registration date : 2009-11-03
Re: A broken dream
thank you brother ........ your poem expresses exactly what the graduated students of Classic who found the doors of MA closed just because they are scapegoats...really feel.
haku- Number of posts : 38
Age : 36
Registration date : 2009-07-27
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