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How can my life go on?

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How can my life go on?

Post by Snow.flower on Mon Apr 26, 2010 7:13 pm

How can my life go on?
feeling attached to the past
and being lost in the present playing tone
hoping everyday this pain is the last
of a single sign I dream
or a candle to bright my future
or a magical stick to offer me some gleam

How can my life go on?
if seconds,minutes,days and months past
witnissing my fears of being happy that never last
wishing everday
to be a bird to fly faraway
like a black horse to run away
travel through the wilderness
and break my chains of hopless
seeking for a shelter or a safe home
where there maybe, joy appears when I'm alone

How can my life go on?
if after a shelter is found I still alone
and once again I look for another power
for some water like a dead flower
something that heels my burning chest
and makes my heart feels a rest
and makes my pains witheraway very fast .
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Re: How can my life go on?

Post by the youth on Mon Apr 26, 2010 8:45 pm

very good poem...
i like it really..way to go snow flower!
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Post by chinda on Tue Apr 27, 2010 4:40 pm

Excellent and wonderful Snow.flower...carry on
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Re: How can my life go on?

Post by Thewolf on Tue Apr 27, 2010 5:29 pm

First of all, it is nice poem, i the poet who mention animals in his/her poem.
You bear a mountain of sadness on your back .
...How can my life go on? it is really strange question!
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Re: How can my life go on?

Post by Toufikzad on Thu Apr 29, 2010 4:14 pm

Hello ...
It's very nice to read these word ...but i have few notes if u please ...
well...i'll try to be frank with u..ok ?? ...i felt that there is no link between ideas...i don't know if u do this with purpose..but i felt the sadness ...the romantic...i felt in different things..but also...i felt no link with them ...as if u r talking about many things...u make me lost ..
but believ me..it's a good work ...nice style...nice words choise..
pliz...take my notes literary ...i hope u reply me...to try to convinse me...maybe i didn't understand..or someting like this..ok??
i hope to read more from u...u have good poems...
ok....thanx alot and accept my best regards
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Re: How can my life go on?

Post by wimened on Thu Apr 29, 2010 8:22 pm

Hello my friend,thanks a lot for reading my poem and thanks also for your comment on it.I do respect your view and to make it clear for you this poem is about sorrow,being lost and seeking for a refuge.just read it again and you will understand.Thanks again toufikzad. jouliya
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Re: How can my life go on?

Post by tones of love on Thu Apr 29, 2010 9:46 pm

very sensitive words snow flower be sure that life can easily go on without any entered of us ok....good luck
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Re: How can my life go on?

Post by debug on Sat May 01, 2010 8:00 pm

well first i want to say that you are great snow fiower you are an angle how can angles give up??????????
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Re: How can my life go on?

Post by Londonhbb on Sat May 01, 2010 8:21 pm

wow snow-flower u r doing a special thing .
Abt those pains don't think a lot bcz time can deal with . Only time can face them ! so let them to it nd just LIVE snow-flower nd remember to live each moment as it's the last one u have .
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