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Depression

Post by bryne_kh2000 on Wed Mar 10, 2010 11:45 am

Depression, sadness, grief and sorrow  


These are words i get used to


"why all this ", many of you wonder 


I will tell you in brief, with chronological order 


It began early, when i was young


I had a cat, i called it "song"


I fed, played, and have  fun with "song"


Until the destiny, took it along


Falling from the roof, the distance was high


The way the cat died, i was shocked by 


Since that cat was my devoted friend


I cried and cried, and was all the time sad


Trying to forget, by the help of time


I was not ready for the worst to come


My grandfather passed away suddenly


The only person i was living with in a harmony


Leaning down trying to kiss his forehead 


"cheer up, it is life" these words i heard


witnessing the funeral, the soil was thrown 


The crowd left, leaving him alone


I was still there in the middle of the dead


Staying to the sunset, i must be mad


It was cloudy, windy, to see was hard


On the death of my grand-fa, nature was sad 


I stood up, took a last glance on his grave


To reach the cemetery door, i must be brave


With unsteady steps, and a random pace


Imagining the dead leaving their graves


Not looking back, i walked straight 


Expecting a shoulder tap, i looked left and right


 


I felt better, one month later


More happier, and a little bit sadder 


Hopeful, taking the advice of an old friend


"smile to life, will smile to you back" i tried


to forget the past, to seek for new start, i decided


But, unfortunately, when i did, smiles were expired....


 


 


 


 
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Re: Depression

Post by Nounette on Wed Mar 10, 2010 2:59 pm

Thank You Bryne !! I Cried When I Read It !! Since I Remembered The Death Of My Grand Father (Allah Yara7mou) !! And My Rabbit When Our Neighbours Stole It Haha And I Cried And Cried !! Carry On Brother !! Don't Stop Here !! Waiting Other Poems !!
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Re: Depression

Post by jamie on Wed Mar 10, 2010 4:30 pm

hello
your poem effected me really
yes we should forget our sad events and carry out living
and never lose hope
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Re: Depression

Post by the youth on Wed Mar 10, 2010 7:11 pm

It was a very good poem bryne..that's what i'm talking about.
well..i didn't have a cat, but i had a grandpa that died and i felt about the same..if not worse.
Try to keep writing whenever you feel down in the dumps.
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Re: Depression

Post by TheUkrainian on Wed Mar 10, 2010 7:57 pm

..................................................Speechless is TheUkrainian !Masterpiece , I really felt this warm words ............................
You could depict all your emotions and feelings within stanzas.
I strongly wish you to keep writing poetry , Its harder than porse.
All best wishes from TheUkrainian 
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Re: Depression

Post by w_ch on Wed Mar 10, 2010 8:14 pm

Hello Bryne,

Your peom has not only an aesthetic value, but it's extended to tackle a common feeling in all of us. To lose the beloved ones makes us rhyme in a beautiful and in an effective way. I haven't found a better way to release the captured and unwanted feelings within, than using a pen on a sheet of paper, guided by the wide imagination. You've nailed both aims: A piece of art in addition to its deep meangings. Well-done Bryne. Carry on and never give up! Wish you the best.
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Re: Depression

Post by princess on Wed Mar 10, 2010 10:54 pm

interesting...you have Edgar Allan Poe's simple expression of deep melancholic feelings....make the beginnig deeper it would be a master piece.Develop the end, your poem is close to what is known as narrative poetry. I did like your poem...a nice surprise

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Re: Depression

Post by bryne_kh2000 on Wed Mar 10, 2010 11:09 pm

Bryne is very appreciated to all your comments . That is what i call the fuel to carry on writing ,  the road seems far though  .Thank you very much
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Re: Depression

Post by NANA on Wed Mar 10, 2010 11:48 pm

It's really nice Bryne. I like it a lot.
Carry on brother.
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Re: Depression

Post by Big brother on Thu Mar 11, 2010 12:00 am

sweet and nice poem Bryne
i realy liked this poem, because it presents a common theme , especially the begining it's artistic for me.

carry on body

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Re: Depression

Post by Thewolf on Thu Mar 11, 2010 12:54 am

Very nice words man
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Re: Depression

Post by burself on Thu Mar 11, 2010 2:44 pm

Really you took me wherever you went through this very effective attractive carefully chosen words poem.congratulations our poet.
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Re: Depression

Post by chinda on Thu Mar 11, 2010 7:00 pm

How effective poem it is Bryne.You made me remember an old grief. Carry on writing Bryne, and I hope that the depression and sadness turn to hope and happiness.
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Re: Depression

Post by bryne_kh2000 on Fri Mar 12, 2010 1:15 pm

Glad that you like my poem. Thank you mates.
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Re: Depression

Post by wimened on Fri Apr 23, 2010 8:54 pm

I can't find the words to describe your wonderful poem.Very sensitive. ya3omri1
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Re: Depression

Post by bryne_kh2000 on Fri Apr 23, 2010 9:01 pm

Thank you Wimend, really appreciated
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Re: Depression

Post by Guest on Sat Apr 24, 2010 3:57 pm

I was still there in the middle of the dead


Staying to the sunset, i must be mad


It was cloudy, windy, to see was hard


On the death of my grand-fa, nature was sad

Bryne, u r talking about me here....
Thanks a lot, very nice and touching words......waiting for more.

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Re: Depression

Post by Thewolf on Sat Apr 24, 2010 4:12 pm

May Allah bless who u lost Bryne, i wish i die before anyone i loved, and still love. u reminded by my three cats who sharing life with me, i lost them one after one since my childhood, i still can see them between my eyes. we r sharing same feelings, we r falling in cats Smile.
I remember too the months when my mum was sick and i suffered, i was young... she still alive hmd, i can't stand if i lose someone i love
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