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~~DEATH~

Post by Diamond Faith on Wed Nov 10, 2010 9:36 pm

Darting into your existence like a heavy grave guest
Spreading horror, digging his poisoned nails deep in your chest
Collecting life out of every cell split it from its nest
Not a nuclear survives him if for escape it gives its best

Eliminate your sprit breaks your soul to tiny bits very slow
So tiny that through the eye of a needle they can go
Your land that bloomed frost up and your skies sizzle and snow
To his haughty brutality drowns your horizon in a torturing woe

Ache and soreness is what you feel when your soul flows away
Like a wild waterfall headed to the unknown not a drop shall stay
In an obeying motion your breaths race to the gates dance and sway
Smirking mocking your helpless body as he wasn’t their loving host for one day

Tormented plagued body fades like a wilting drooping flower
He harshly sucks its strength its lust its will and its power
Watered by a storm of firing tears sinking his lands in a furious shower
Mourning his lost sweet fellow soul caged in a soaring unreachable tower

Humble and worthless upon his merciless magnificence you shall feel
As a legend tale monster he consumes your guts like a yummy meal
A rotten hollow frame is all what’s left of you after your soul he will steal
Neither a philosopher nor a prophet your immortal moldy wound can heal
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Post by Bacha Saidi on Fri Nov 12, 2010 1:40 pm

Really a nice poem! wow!
The technique of the acrostich seems to decorate beautifuly the stanzas of the poem.
The architecture of this genuine piece reveals your creativity and commitment to art.
I am not a critic of art, rather someone who appreciate the beauty of words that your poem supplies.
May I ask you about your source of inspiration; I mean poets that influence your imagination.
I recall Emile dickenson, T.S.Eliot, and Y.B. Yeats...among those who wrote on DEATH.
Do you intend to write universally, or just a flow of ideas and ephemiral thought?
All in all, it's an amazing piece of writing, hopefully its yours.
Regards, Bacha

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Post by Diamond Faith on Fri Nov 12, 2010 6:18 pm

Dear Bacha ;
I am truelly flattered about your words .
This may sound strange , but I am influenced by none of the names you've mentioned above, not that I think all of them are great artists , and brilliant in what they do.
I know very little about poetry though.
I simply like to RHYME :p
It all started after my acquaintance of a dear friend of mine. He is insanely fond of rhyming , and everything he says , he say it with a rhyme , and I have to say that made him a really obnixious and loathsome person to be around, but some how he dragged me into his little twisted game , and I turned to be not bad myself Smile
I wrote this piece few months ago , after I was thumped by the death of three of my beloved relatives in a sorrowful unfortunate accident. (may their soul rest in peace)

I was grieved to the soul. I felt like a huge elephant is sitting on my chest , and I had to toss up emotions somehow. I was in bed already and too lazy to get up and fetch a pen and paper, so I wrote this poem on my mobile phone, and felt a great relief after that.
Much love and regards.

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Post by bilinda on Fri Nov 12, 2010 6:50 pm

Please my sister accept my congratulations. I do swear that i felt that i'm reading to a famous poet. It is really nice. Keep posting please. i think i like to rhyme too.
PS: I am sorry about the death of your relatives. May heaven be their eternal home.
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Post by Diamond Faith on Fri Nov 12, 2010 7:01 pm

oooh my dear , I endlessly appreciate your genuine complement.
U know this is the firt time I ever share my writings.
The few people who have seen the things I write have been pushing me to show them to people , but for some reasons , I kept them for myself.

lately my i was really sad when my hard disk was damaged and I lost all my data : teaching materials (am a teacher) , writings , poems , and my diaries that i have been wrting since 3 years. Sad
I am gonna share what's left or what I was able to recover.
Again , thank you for liking my poem.

Hugs.
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