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the unknown
by imy Fri Jun 05, 2009 3:17 pm
I tried to talk to a flower,but its thorns stung me
I attempted t be a moon's light,but its beauty opposed me
I tried to follow the sea, but its tides rejected me
I was huddled to fire,but its sparks wounded me
I tried to realize my dreams,but they kept escaping me
I attempted to rely on hope,but it kept avoiding me
I tried to keep my life,but death kept calling me
I attempted to face my fear,but my strength betrayed me.
I attempted t be a moon's light,but its beauty opposed me
I tried to follow the sea, but its tides rejected me
I was huddled to fire,but its sparks wounded me
I tried to realize my dreams,but they kept escaping me
I attempted to rely on hope,but it kept avoiding me
I tried to keep my life,but death kept calling me
I attempted to face my fear,but my strength betrayed me.
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Re: the unknown
by Amir Sat Jun 06, 2009 7:32 pm
Good Imy I really admired you poem.
But please try to be more optimistic. We, your friends, will never
betray you.
trus God and remember TIME IS MONEY
But please try to be more optimistic. We, your friends, will never
betray you.
trus God and remember TIME IS MONEY
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Re: the unknown
by Hush Sat Jun 06, 2009 9:33 pm
I do like the poem too, really.
Amir you know I don't think imy is pessimist it's just her way of writing. If you read a dark poem it dosn't mean that the writer is said or that he's pessimist, just admire the way he express himself (and sometimes poems might be interpreted the other way round) .
Amir you know I don't think imy is pessimist it's just her way of writing. If you read a dark poem it dosn't mean that the writer is said or that he's pessimist, just admire the way he express himself (and sometimes poems might be interpreted the other way round) .
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Re: the unknown
by the youth Mon Jun 08, 2009 4:58 pm
Good poem imy...
i just wanna say that rythm should be taken care of..so as the reader would enjoy reading your poem..
try to write more...
i just wanna say that rythm should be taken care of..so as the reader would enjoy reading your poem..
try to write more...
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Re: the unknown
by Hush Tue Jun 09, 2009 10:32 pm
Come on the youth forget about every 'should' in poetry, poetry defy rules and conventions...
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Re: the unknown
by the youth Thu Jun 11, 2009 12:21 am
Though my limitted experience in poetry is as good as dead when compared to yours,yet i almost swear that sometimes language is the one to dress one's poem a beautiful image..not ideas.
Words have power don't they? you taught me that..
Words have power don't they? you taught me that..
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Re: the unknown
by Hush Thu Jun 11, 2009 12:46 am
the poem is not read by the mind, neither by the eyes, sometimes by ears but most of all by heart. Don't try to understand a poem first, let it make you understand yourself without really understanding yourself...
I do believe that we don't become a poet we're born poet!
I do believe that we don't become a poet we're born poet!
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Re: the unknown
by imy Thu Jun 11, 2009 3:14 pm
I DO SOMETIMES EXPRESS MY FOLISH THOUGHTS THROUGH A KIND OF POEMS.BUT MOST OF THEM SHOULD BE READ FROM "THE HEART POINT OF VIEW"IF I MAY SAY SO.THE YOUTH IS A GOOD STUDENT SIR?I ACCEPT TO BE TAUGHT BY YOU AS WELL ESPECIALLY IN THIS FIELD.I DO LIKE YOUR POEMS SIR. 
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Re: the unknown
by the youth Fri Jun 12, 2009 11:25 pm
"My task which i'm trying to achieve is by the power of the word,to make you hear,to make you feel_it is,before all,to make you see.That_and no more,and it is everything" J.Conrad.
I like what you said Mr.Hush..and you know what..the only reason that do is your beautiful language you used to make your point.
Ironically,it seems like you ended up making mine..
I like what you said Mr.Hush..and you know what..the only reason that do is your beautiful language you used to make your point.
Ironically,it seems like you ended up making mine..
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Re: the unknown
by Thewolf Sat Aug 07, 2010 8:42 pm
Maybe aces can hide deep feelings, but pens never lie if we put them on papers...
I'm going to call you again and again to carry on writing Imy
Wish you good luck
I'm going to call you again and again to carry on writing Imy
Wish you good luck
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